Sunday, August 01, 2010

Microfiction Monday

The Picture
The Story 
(in 144 characters... sorry for the cheat. I'm out of practice)

Not so much a secret as purposeful neglect.
He said he would let it all fall down.
And it did. It fell.
While memories like stones chipped away.


15 comments:

  1. Oh, this is so melancholy, as are several of today's entries. I like your unique take on the picture.

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  2. Ah, how true! I love your take on the pic of the day! Have a great week!

    Sylvia

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  3. Sounds like a broken heart to me...

    nice one

    you can hear the echos

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  4. I love the "Not so much a secret as purposeful neglect." Very well done my friend. Let's hope the memories can be set back in stone as one whole. Well done. Have a wonderful Monday :)

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  5. A thoughtful microfiction, that conveys a lot of emotion. I wonder why he let it fall apart?

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  6. Oops, these divorces can get so messy! My 140 is here

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  7. That's very poetic. And rather romantic. Very good.

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  8. A bit of malice aforethought there - nicely chilling!

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  9. But whom was he spiting to let it all fall like that? A nagging wife? The neighbors? Selfish relatives? Ahhh, I want more!

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  10. you can certainly cut to 140 or less.
    nice take!

    I played too.

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  11. So much in those few words. Great!

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  12. I suppose some people enjoy letting things go bad.

    But this was good...well done!

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  13. Aww, a slow farewell it seems. A much longer journey than its creation, probably.

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  14. Thanks to all of you for commenting. i promise to visit all of you to read your stories and comment!

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  15. Oh so true, sometimes we just got to let go of the past and make tracks for the future. Wonderful look at the picture.

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