Sunday, September 05, 2010

Microfiction Monday

The Picture


The Story
(in 140 characters)

This black mountain
was ferociously loud.
Without food, water
People or love
The fight had left him.
He braced himself for
Its dark embrace.

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20 comments:

  1. Sylvia K9/06/2010 12:15 AM

    Ah, a dark one for the day!! Yours are always good -- dark or light! And it fits the pic for the day, too! Have a great Labor Day!

    Sylvia

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  2. Peggy9/06/2010 12:43 AM

    Oh so sad, but the situation this lad is in is dire.
    Very well written, I liked it so much!
    Have a wonderful Holiday tomorrow.

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  3. moondustwriter9/06/2010 2:34 AM

    I think we felt the same thing in that picture. A sad ending

    Nice MFM and thanks for the visit

    Moon smiles

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  4. Ellie Garratt9/06/2010 2:52 AM

    Dark and forboding. You've capture the image perfectly. I loved it.

    Have a great week.

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  5. Anonymous9/06/2010 2:55 AM

    WOOT!!! New theme. I really like it. Maybe there will be a light at the end of the tunnel. It's always good to hope there is :) Well done. Happy Labor Day :)

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  6. Gemma Wiseman9/06/2010 5:40 AM

    Love the "dark embrace" image! Quite intimidating! Dramatic micro!

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  7. Bill ~ {The Old Fart}9/06/2010 8:39 AM

    Poor Soul, one has to wonder how the poor soul got to this situation.

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  8. septembermom9/06/2010 9:35 AM

    Great imagery Jillien!

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  9. Nessa9/06/2010 9:42 AM

    I can see why he'd give up hope. Good story.

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  10. jabblog9/06/2010 9:57 AM

    There's a lot of death and despair being generated by this week's photo.
    Beautifully written :-)

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  11. hope9/06/2010 11:16 AM

    Ah, today's sad one. Someone had to do it and you did it well!

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  12. G-Man9/06/2010 11:20 AM

    Some folks just give up cause they are tired...
    Nice take Jillian, and thanks for the visit...G

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  13. Diane9/06/2010 11:21 AM

    So sad, but when its over, its over....

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  14. Anonymous9/06/2010 11:24 AM

    Ohh...this makes me sad. The poor fellow needed a hug, didn't he?
    Have a good week ahead. Cheers!

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  15. Pat9/06/2010 11:59 AM

    I like your poetic writing. This is dark and sad, but a great dramatic story. Well done!

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  16. One Prayer Girl9/06/2010 2:13 PM

    I think you captured the flavor of the picture perfectly.

    My first micro is up.

    PG

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  17. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis Hall9/06/2010 3:29 PM

    dark embrace..

    what a hearty grace.
    lovely done!

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  18. Anonymous9/06/2010 4:09 PM

    Quite the sad ending. Wonderfully done.

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  19. John (@bookdreamer)9/06/2010 5:42 PM

    It be an echo of the deep...Here's my 140. Sorry for the delay but dealing with drama of son having to dash across Italy to catch his flight. Hope your week goes better then his!

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  20. SouthLakesMom9/06/2010 9:56 PM

    Wow. Very somber, but fitting.

    It amazes me how we all draw different things out of the illustrations.

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